Once upon a time there was a beautiful princess whose name was Lily Rose. She had gold hair and her dress is as blue as the big blue sky. The dress had a pink flower. She has a little brother called Jacob who is only two. He also had gold hair like his sister Lily Rose and he had a blue sote as blue as the big blue ocean.
One day Lily Rose went to pick black berries and she decided to eat one and it was poison.Then she fainted and so her mum and dad took her to her room. 2 days later she woke up and her little brother Jacob was 3 and
He was so happy that his sister Lily Rose was awake.
Then her little brother Jacob went to the pool with Lily Rose. She said ´time to go´ and Jacob was too far away to hear. Lily Rose thought that Jacob was behind her and she went home and she realised that Jacob was not behind her so she went looking for him.
And then 1 hour later Lily Rose found Jacob. He was very scared so he ran to Lily Rose and gave her a big hug. He was so happy that he was back with his sister safely.
Hi Isabella, Maybe next time you could use full stops. This reminded me of the movie Sleeping beauty. I love your story, From Bella at Rawhiti School :)
ReplyDeleteHi Bella i did use full stops
DeleteHi Izzy I love your writing but when you get to the end of the story when rose finds her brother, maybe you could describe how he found her.
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